Fly Fishing Big Bear
Feed back on my poem?
i need some feed back and what to add next thanks
Bears
Bears bears they are brown
brown like the dirt on the ground
claws so sharp just like a knife
slashing at everything with all its might
big and round just like the sun
hunting fish like a net
roaring as loud as a whale
standing on its hind legs like a dog
climbing so high like a flying bee
fur so thick like a chunk of wood
tails are short like a bob tailed cat
I LOVED your poem; it’s so cute.
If I may, I made small revisions, line breaks to form 3 quatrains and used punctuation and added a last line to make it flow better and hold your readers’ attention and focus.
it’s such a cute poem, did I tell you that? 
Bears, bears they are brown,
brown like the dirt on the ground,
claws so sharp just like a knife
slashing at everything with all their might.
Big and round just like the sun,
hunting for fish, paws as a net,
roaring as loud as a whale,
standing on their hind legs like a dog.
Climbing so high like a towering tree,
fur so thick like a thick blanket garment,
Their tails are short like a bob tailed cat.
Don’t ever mess with a big, big brown bear!
Fly Fishing for BIG BONNEVILLE CUTTHROAT TROUT #1 (Utah)
